Entwhistle has been written to be read aloud to children.
There are two things to remember:
1) It's a special thing, to tell a child about unicorns for the first time. I would like to hear from people who have that experience - I would like to hear your stories, and the age of the child.
2) The commas are there partly to provide natural places to take a breath, letting the child being read to absorb one phrase at a time, in what may be a complicated sentence. A phrase is a cluster of words expressing one thought, and a sentence can be composed of several phrases/thoughts, all linked together to express a whole set of thoughts. Sometimes one sentence can be like a linked-together story - a lot for a child, or anyone, to understand. So I put in commas, like little signposts, to say, "we can rest on this corner for a moment, before we continue on, across the street, to the next block". Stop, look, and listen, lets the child absorb what's happening in the story, almost from inside the story.
Have a nice time!
Uni says "hi",
Pat
There are two things to remember:
1) It's a special thing, to tell a child about unicorns for the first time. I would like to hear from people who have that experience - I would like to hear your stories, and the age of the child.
2) The commas are there partly to provide natural places to take a breath, letting the child being read to absorb one phrase at a time, in what may be a complicated sentence. A phrase is a cluster of words expressing one thought, and a sentence can be composed of several phrases/thoughts, all linked together to express a whole set of thoughts. Sometimes one sentence can be like a linked-together story - a lot for a child, or anyone, to understand. So I put in commas, like little signposts, to say, "we can rest on this corner for a moment, before we continue on, across the street, to the next block". Stop, look, and listen, lets the child absorb what's happening in the story, almost from inside the story.
Have a nice time!
Uni says "hi",
Pat